Post by Caitlin on May 9, 2005 18:12:08 GMT -5
Or, "Finnar's Contribution to the Cause." ;D Seriously, folks, here's a very good example of what you don't want your role-play session to look like:
The above is flawed in several ways: 1) "Iluvlegolass2446" is not an appropriate character name, 2) it has no discernable grammar, containing several spelling errors (is anything spelled right?!), sporadic puncutation, and horrible sentince syntax.
Or this one:
The above is a little better, with only a few grammatical errors (in other words, you can actually read it without translating into English, or getting a headache). However, it has this fatal flaw: no one cares what the cornfields (or are they barley fields?) look like!!! A sentence to describe them would be fine, and perhaps one use of imagry. The above example has five (I think), and leaves the reader confused (what's twinkling like the shining eyes of a mother, again, the stars or the fields?)
*shudders* Just say no, people, just say no.
Iluvlegolass2446 steppd int teh oub. she wuz esited becuz there wuz goin te b a party. Iluvlegolass2446 stepped up to Finniare 'Hey u esited bout te peatry' se sed.
The above is flawed in several ways: 1) "Iluvlegolass2446" is not an appropriate character name, 2) it has no discernable grammar, containing several spelling errors (is anything spelled right?!), sporadic puncutation, and horrible sentince syntax.
Or this one:
Wailetathae floated up the gravel walkway leading to the pub. The cornfeilds sayed with thier rows of barley stretching beyond the golden grasp of the gods. The barley danced like emrald fairys wightless to an unkown rythym only known to the gods who came before the reaches of time. The silver stars twinkled above thier heads like the shining eyes of a mother about to put her young babe to rest in a cradle of grass of gold and...
The above is a little better, with only a few grammatical errors (in other words, you can actually read it without translating into English, or getting a headache). However, it has this fatal flaw: no one cares what the cornfields (or are they barley fields?) look like!!! A sentence to describe them would be fine, and perhaps one use of imagry. The above example has five (I think), and leaves the reader confused (what's twinkling like the shining eyes of a mother, again, the stars or the fields?)
*shudders* Just say no, people, just say no.
